K-ON! College Manga (けいおん!college)

December 21st, 2012

Let me be up front here for a sec – there is less Yuri in this new volume of K-ON! than there ever has been, which is to say, there isn’t a single shred of Yuri, even if you work at it.* Even Mugi has nothing to work with. So if Yuri is your single criteria for interest in this series, you’ll be disappointed in this volume when Yen Press publishes it.

If what you liked about the series is the interaction between the members of Houkago Tea Time, you’ll still have to deal with some change, but you’re less likely to be disappointed. ^_^

In K-ON! College (けいおん!college), Yui and the others find that the “Light Music” Club at college has a number of previous members who perform as a band. Tall, attractive Sara, gadfly Ayame and punk-y Akira end up taking their new kouhai under their wings, sort of. Akira, by virtue of proximity is asked to take care of Yui who, without Ui doing everything for her, is more annoying than I can adequately describe. The focus of the volume is mostly on Akira, her transformation to the punk look and her desire to be a pro, with some plot side trips.

With the focus so heavily on Akira and Yui, the rest of both bands fall back into supporting character roles. The real victim here is Mugi. If she says ten things through this volume, it’s a lot. Okay, yes, one of those things is, “Sabotage? That’s something I want to try!” But that’s her best line.

As a post-series fanfic, it suffers from the fate of many fanfic – the shift of focus from the main characters to someone else. But the someone else is as goofy as the originals, so it’s not much of a sacrifice. ^_^

Ratings:

Art – 7
Characters – 9
Story – 7 There is a limit to how many “Wake Yui up” jokes we can read before they begin to wear thin
Yuri – 0*
Service – 2

Overall – 7

*There is a teeny-weeny window for implausible slashers to pair Yui and Akira, but the creator works hard at limiting even that.



Yuri Manga: Akaneiro Confiture (茜色コンフィチュール)

December 20th, 2012

The biggest problem with collections of one-shots that ran in Comic Yuri Hime, is that when collected together, it’s easier to see any structural flaws in the creator’s vision. In the case of Akaneiro Confiture (茜色コンフィチュール) by Kurokiri Misao, the major flaw is that she likes not-particularly happy stories with not-particularly sane or grounded people.

The story that is most memorable has become representative of this book in my mind. Unfortunately titled “In the Closet,” it is not a story about sexual identity, but about obsession and narcissism. It’s also a creepy lesbian doll story. So if that’s the kind of thing you like, you’ll like this book.

Ratings:

Art – 6
Story- Variable, but averaging about a 5
Characters – Same
Yuri – 7
Service – 3, for creepy lesbian doll story

Overall – 6



Eden no Higastotsuka Manga (エデンの東戸塚)

December 19th, 2012

I think it’s time we talked about “I don’t like her, until she’s not here.” This is a common plot complication in Yuri and it’s time we pointed out how dysfunctional it is.

Those of you currently in like with someone or have in the past liked someone a lot, what was the general feeling you had when you were with them? Was it annoyance, irritation, being utterly vexed by their every word and action? No, it was more likely to be “I love being with them, no matter what we do.”

If a person annoys the living hell out of you, how selfish and bizarre is it to suddenly be even more annoyed when they aren’t there? Basically, it’s treating that other person as if they are an accessory to your life.

In Eden no Higashitotsuka (エデンの東戸塚), Kiku, having managed to gain entrance to a good high school, is determined to study really hard and become an elite. So when perfect, rich and all-too-easygoing Hiyoshi-san turns out to be her next door neighbor and in her class, she’s vexed at the other girl’s intrusive overtures of friendship. Even though she resists, Kiku finds herself drawn into Hiyoshi-san’s plans, even joining her in the Manga Research Club.

Just as she’s settling into her life, a doujinshi event pops up, causing Kiku even more stress. It turns out, in sudden plot change, that Kiku is a doujinshi novel writer and feels the need to hide it from everyone. Although the Manga Club invites her to join them, she’s got a table of her own. At the event, Kiku finds herself in crisis when she’s discovered by Hiyoshi-san. Crisis quickly averted as Hiyoshi admits that she’s a huge fan.

Although Kiku still thinks she thinks Hiyoshi-san is annoying, when the other girl goes home, she finds herself at loose ends. Crisis averted when Hiyoshi-san retursn to the dorm. The volume ends, one desperately hopes, with Kiku dropping the pretense of disliking Hiyoshi-san.

Ratings:

Art – 7
Story – 7 with a pivot mid-stream
Characters – 6 As they are mostly one-note songs
Yuri – 2
Service – 2

Overall – 6

It’d be nice to see if anything actually develops between the two.



Yuri Manga: Asagao to Kase-san (あさがおと加瀬さん)

December 18th, 2012

Yamada is a completely typical Japanese girl, completely undistinguished, she thinks. On the other hand, Kase-san is athletic, attractive, popular. Kase-san’s a star long distance runner and Yamada is a nobody. There’s no way they could ever be friends.

In Asagao to Kase-san (あさがおと加瀬さん) Yamada finds that, amazingly, she does have something in common with Kase-san – they both take care of the flower boxes full of morning glories (asagao) on the school grounds. And, amazingly, they do become friends.

But as much as their friendship brings her joy, Yamada is tortured by Kase-san’s proximity. Her feelings are becoming far more intense than just friendship. She and Kase-san become a little closer when the runner decides that she’ll train Yamada for the marathon in gym class. They go out to buy Yamada proper running shoes, and we can see that their feelings are the same, but can they? It all comes to a head during the marathon when Yamada’s training is put to the test and so are Kase-san’s priorities.

Yet again, Hirari brings us a “Story A“-type story in which the pages end just as the story is beginning but, in this case, the emotions ring true and the story left me smiling. As “Story A” goes, this was a lovely little example of the beginning of a first love between two girls. ^_^

Ratings:

Art – 7 A little messy, but I liked it
Story – 8
Character – 8
Yuri – 8
Service – 2

Overall – 8

The story broke no new ground, but the characters’ reactions were real enough to carry the volume. Of course, I wish we got to see them after this volume ends, when their relationship begins taking off. ^_^



What, How and Why of Writing a Query Letter for Manga

December 16th, 2012

From time to time here on Okazu I post opinion and perspective about publishing manga. If you are an aspiring artist or writer, please read this first: Top 7 Things Every Young Artist or Writer Needs To Know.

When you write to a publisher or agent with a proposal, hoping that it will get you published, what you are sending is called a “Query Letter.” Recently, I am once again reminded that the concept of the Query Letter is vague and ill-defined for aspiring manga artists.

There are a lot of reasons why most aspiring manga artists are confused when it comes to Query Letters. Let’s start with a few reasons why this is:

You are not a Japanese manga artist – Take a look at your collection. Do you see many non-Japanese names in your manga collection? You may well have some indie comic artists, and a few OEL from when Tokyopop was publishing them, perhaps a few bandee dessinee, but realistically, when manga fans are looking for manga, they mean stuff drawn and published in Japan. Because of this simple reality…

Few American manga publishers are accepting submissions for…anything. Most manga publishers license Japanese properties, and aren’t looking for anything outside that. Because of this…

There is no established path from amateur to professional manga-style artist in the West. We have no manga magazines, no apprentice path, no companies hiring artists. Because there is no formal path, there is no reason for artists to learn to write Query Letters.

What does this mean to you? It means that if you want your manga to be published you have incredibly limited options right now.

When people ask me about which company they should approach, I always say the same thing – forget waiting to be discovered.

Do it yourself – (The Advantages and Disadvantages of Self-Publishing Your Manga) You have unprecedented options in terms of self-publishing right now. Webcomics, Print on Demand, Pixiv and DeviantArt give you access and ability to create, promote and publish in ways that never existed before. Use them. Work on your art and build your audience.

If you’re looking to a publisher to be your springboard, you have pretty limited options for getting your work seen:

Portfolio Reviews – Some publishers do what is called “portfolio reviews” at events. Check out major comic and anime/manga events to see if a manga publisher is sending editors to do this. At the Overseas Festival portion of this past Comitia, the “Kaigai Festa“, several Japanese publishers were doing portfolio review for overseas artists. Portfolio reviews are your absolute best chance to get a manga editor to look at your work and tell you the truth about it. It might, potentially, be very painful. This pain can be life-changing. Don’t run from it. Learn from it, grow from it.

Japanese Magazines Looking For Overseas WorkMorning Magazine does a International Comic Contest every year. The caveat here is that they aren’t actually looking for manga-style art. They are quite specifically looking for your own unique style. Kochi Indies Magazine also did a contest soliciting overseas work. This kind of thing is still pretty rare, so you should take the opportunities where you can find them.

Which brings me to the Query Letter. When you are taking the initiative and writing a publisher with a pitch for a story, you are writing what is known as a Query Letter.

I have written an article about rejection. Why Your Story Was Rejected – The Query Letter Conundrum that discusses some of the main failures in query letters. In a nutshell, here is the major problem in most query letters I receive:

You have to sell yourself to me. The idea of a Query Letter is to make your work sound relevant and appealing to that publisher and profitable for them. It is, in effect your job interview with that publisher and your goal is to convince them that your story is good for their business.

(The other, unwritten, rule of Query Letters is that there is no magic formula. What will appeal to one person will put another off. The best you can do is to try and avoid being too clever. Just say what you have to say as compellingly and unpretentiously as you can.)

Here are some tips to writing a decent Query Letter – this is my perspective and may not work for other people at all. I invite other publishers, agents, editors to weigh in with your own preferences here!

Read and understand the publisher’s submission guidelines before you write your letter. Don’t write the publisher asking if you can be the exception to the rule.

Be polite, even (especially) if you are rejected – Nothing good will come of you writing in anger. Ever. Chances are I won’t read it anyway, because remember, you are trying to sell your story to me.

Be concise – Find the simplest, clearest, most compelling way to describe your story. Don’t give me hints, imply twists, or rest on cliched vagueness.

Be Complete – State plainly how many pages your story is, whether it is complete or in process, how often you are currently releasing it online, if that is applicable.

Be Valuable – Let the publisher know why you would be a great match for their business. You have a popular webcomic and will be bringing an established market to their publication, or you have great promotional efforts you’ve used in the past. A previous book sold well, you have a name in the industry, any awards, citations or achievements.

Now that we’ve covered some general tips, let’s take a look at the final piece of a Query Letter – the descriptive copy.

Today I came across an item online that had the most pretentious description I’ve ever read. I would never buy the item because by the time I was done reading the description, I still had no idea what it was – and because that kind of pretentious writing annoys the hell out of me.

Writing descriptive copy is not at all easy. If you love your story, it’s actually incredibly difficult. You know what happens, you know why. And now you need to tell me – and I don’t care. Until you make me care. You need to convince me that your story is worth reading and is worth publishing. Your description must include the following:

What is the story about? Ad copy usually ends with a question or an ellipsis, but the publisher needs to know what actually happens. “…chaos ensues” is not an adequate description. “…the rats take over the shop, but as they drive away from their past, the girl gets the girl” is better.

What makes the story unique? I’ve written 2300+ posts here, so you gotta assume I’ve watched and read a lot of anime and manga. And that’s not including stuff I read and don’t review here. I’ve pretty much seen every possible story ending, so what about your story makes it stand out from everyone else’s? Romeo and Juliet, coming out, Crime and Punishment; what’s your take on your story?

What are the most important elements of your story? Finish this sentence, “The most amazing thing about my story is….”   That’s what will sell a publisher, if anything. Nail that…or don’t send that letter.